Deep POV has been around for a while, but many authors are either frightened by it or confused by it. But when used correctly, it is a powerful tool that can take your writing to the next level.
What is it?
The best explanation I ever heard for deep POV came from Kristen Kieffer from She's Novel. Deep POV attempts to get rid of all traces of authorship. It's taking the reader so deep into the thoughts, experiences, and emotions of the characters that the reader is completely immersed in that character. In essence, they become that character. They feel what the character feels. They experience what the character experiences.
Why use it?
The goal of fiction is to create a fictional dream. To make your readers forget who and where they are for a while. When you do that, you've hooked them. They will want to turn the pages until they get to the end. And then they'll be sad the story is over. They'll want more from you. By using deep POV, you heighten that fictional dream. It becomes the fictional experience. You will take their breath away.
Can you only use it for drama?
This is one excuse I've heard some writers use for not employing deep POV. And it's not valid. Romance, comedy, cozy mystery - they all benefit from deep POV. In romance, don't you want your readers to fall in love with the hero every bit much as the heroine does? Don't you want them to laugh along with your characters? Of course! The point of deep POV is to heighten the reading experience. And if you do that in romance or light fiction, you'll capture your audience.
How does it work?
Here's the crux of the matter. There are several ways to know you're writing deep POV.
1. Get rid of as many italics as possible. Change internal thought from being italicized, first person, present tense, to plain text, third person, past tense. For example:
This is the weirdest thing that ever happened to me. (not deep POV)
This was the weirdest that that ever happened to her. (deep POV)
The italics pop the reader from the fictional dream. Don't do it!
2. Watch for key telling words and eliminate them unless they appear in dialogue. These words include: thought, felt, saw, heard, smelled, remembered, hoped, imagined, watched, etc. You don't use these words when you think to yourself, so don't use them when writing. For example:
She saw the burglar sprint from the house. (not deep POV)
The burglar sprinted from the house. (deep POV)
There went the burglar, sprinting from the house. (even better deep POV, because that's how you think)
3. Don't tell emotion. This kind of goes back to #2, but I want to expand on it. Don't say that she felt nervous. Or angry, or tired, or sad. Show it, let the readers feel it and identify it themselves. For example:
She was nervous. (not deep POV)
She twisted the bracelet around and around on her wrist and tapped her toes as an entire colony of butterflies took up residence in her stomach. (deep POV)
Can't you feel her nerves in the second example? And because you've experience similar feelings in your life, you know what they are. And identify with the character.
Don't be afraid of deep POV, no matter what genre you write. Take the plunge, give it a try, and watch it transform your writing.
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Liz Tolsma is the author of several WWII novels and prairie romance novellas. She is a popular speaker and an editor and resides next to a Wisconsin farm field with her husband and their two daughters. Her son is a U.S. Marine. She enjoys reading, walking, working in her large perennial garden, kayaking, and camping. Please visit her blog, The Story behind the Story, at www.liztolsma.com and follow her on Facebook, Twitter (@LizTolsma), and LinkedIn. She is also a regular contributor to the Pencildancer blog and the Midwest Almanac blog.